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treehugger
05-18-2005, 07:44 PM
Deleted because I can't write and it sounded childish.
LIBRA
05-19-2005, 06:56 AM
stop that, bring it back!!!
We wont judge you!!
PEACE FROG
05-19-2005, 07:28 AM
Something tells me you were'nt writing a story about Issac Hayes!?!?? Come on honey what's up?????
treehugger
06-01-2005, 03:05 PM
so I tried to re-write my poem/essay and it came out a tad better this time...please be gentle.

Murderers Thumbs

The hand of a murderer
or so the palm reader said
i feel kind...most of the time
in between fits of rage

the last outburst landed me
six months in a mental hospital
my thumbs mark me
the murderer's thumbs

the rage bubbles up inside me
to be quenched by beer
to be quenched by food
to be quenched by drugs
to be swallowed
you are what you eat

i love animals
i love trees
i love my cat
i love life
in between fits of rage

i look at the new girl
everybodys sweetheart
and i know i've been cast aside
and the rage simmers
the murderers thumbs twitch

and i drink
and i forget
or try to

i think of sunshine
i think of chocolate
i think of puppies
but it is just a mask
for the rage
until it consumes me.

don't forget about the time you put that hole in that wall
or the time you broke that window
or...that unspeakable time
the time you seriously flipped

it whispers to me
now i lay me down to sleep
i hope you die before i wake
feral
06-01-2005, 04:24 PM
That's pretty good, I liked it. It was a tad creepy, but I can kinda relate to it.
PEACE FROG
06-01-2005, 07:17 PM
Two murderers thumbs up!! Well, well I dont quite know what to say*subliminal*- You're scaring me-*subliminal*.... Very very Good my dear. Well written!!! Got any more???? :) ;)
Pedata
06-01-2005, 07:37 PM
That's good!!! I love the 'inbetween fits of rage".


Wow!!!
LIBRA
06-02-2005, 06:06 AM
Oh Kath, I feel for ya sister. You really seem like an awesome person, from your thoughts and feelings on subjects.
Dont let the past get you down, dont let it consume you, tommorow will be a brighter day!!!
And that was really great writing, do not put yourself down like that keep that chin full of hairs way up there!! ;)
Depression is serious and thinking of happy thoughts is good, but its also good to get the negative ones out too so that you dont blow up, so keep writing if you'd like we would never judge you, not the locals anyway.

:group_hug peace,
Denise